Bones Drabble: Seeing Red

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Written for amilyn for a drabble meme.  Click the link if you'd like to leave a prompt.

Title: Seeing Red (Since Joss Whedon's birthday was yesterday. ;) )
Fandom: Bones
Characters: Brennan
Rating: PG or K
Word Count: 100
Timeline: Set between The Wannabe in the Weeds and The Pain in the Heart.
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Prompt: Brennan and fear.

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Seeing Red

Brennan sees red.

Carmine, scarlet, crimson, and ruby pour from spider-cracked windows, splatter across rows of Angela’s pristine stretched canvases, paint the strong mouth that traversed the territory of hers only once -- because of a prodigal father's holiday wish and an eccentric woman's whimsy -- but arrested her breath so many times she ceased keeping count ten thousand inhalations ago.

Dawn's light marches her to wakefulness -- and the crushing knowledge that her stomach (her gut, he would have said) -- telegraphs eons before her conscious mind catches up.

Seconds, minutes, twenty lifetimes later, she kneels and retches into the toilet's mandalic waters.

 

Comments

[last-archangel.livejournal.com]

Aw, poor Brennan. This is excellently written.

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

Thank you, M.

[heather-berry78.livejournal.com]

Great use of the different colours. I loved the the phrase *traversed the territory of hers* as well. Gives me an image that it was almost unwanted, and then the contrast of how it has been thought of so many times since. Powerful and evocative.

I had to look up Mandalic! Wonderful!

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

Thanks! So pleased you enjoyed this. :)

[amilyn.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Gorgeous use of language. I love the preoccupation with tiny details and the scatteredness of her thinking that's evident.

[makd.livejournal.com]

Potent view of Brennan's struggle.

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

Thanks, M.

[ggjunkie33.livejournal.com]

Absolutely beautiful imagery here, loved all the different words for red, and your word choice is amazing! I really liked the phrase because of a prodigal father's holiday wish and an eccentric woman's whimsy ♥

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

Thanks very much, L. :D

[late-heart.livejournal.com]

my heart....

oh, oh, oh, Temperance...

That is the most articulate I can be, having shared such brutal intimacy with her.

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

♥

Many thanks for your kind comments.

[a2zmom.livejournal.com]

LOcely. This is the scene and the emotion we should have seen.

[buffyangellvr23.livejournal.com]

Wow this is awesome!

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

Thanks a lot. :)

[mdemvizi.livejournal.com]

You know? I try not to think about those scenes. This just makes me wish that the strike never happened and we got a whole season.

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

It really is too bad we got a truncated season.

[michellemtsu.livejournal.com]

This is exactly what was missing. Loved it.

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

Thanks very much for reading and commenting. I'm glad this missing scene worked for you. :)

[binkii822.livejournal.com]

Beautiful imagery. Thank you for sharing this.

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

[tempertemper77.livejournal.com]

I love this from start to finish... but this was truly fab:

the crushing knowledge that her stomach (her gut, he would have said) -- telegraphs eons before her conscious mind catches up

:)

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

Thank you, K. ♥

[soyan.livejournal.com]

Wow. This is more abstract than your usual. Really love this.

[lerdo.livejournal.com]

Thanks. :) Glad this worked for you. The "abstraction" seemed appropriate because she was dreaming. In general, I don't think this style of writing works that well for longer pieces. (I'm majorly generalizing here. *g*)