Wow, I'm apparently very naive - I never even knew people could write whole stories in 2nd person narration. I guess it's personal preference, but it seems kind of unnatural to me; the only place I've seen it done is in really old epics (e.g. Homer) where the narrator will step out of third person to address one of the characters and it always seems odd.

And I totally agree on point 5. Same goes for shrugged too. Words are not shrug-able. :)